As a watcher I saw the original version of your image and I thought the same as maybe-paper-hearts, the goal posts and lines did detract from the pure fantasy look of the image that you were creating, and now they’re gone, it looks perfect! I think your pose here works really well too, as it really does imbue a sense of darkness, melancholy and of a somewhat broken character. I’m pleased you revisited the editing, it was totally worth doing, as now you have a very powerful and visually strong image!
I agree when you say “Thank you so much for the advice, I wish people would do that more often”, but unlike maybe-paper-hearts I never feel comfortable doing so, and so never ever do, as I don’t know how an individual might react to such things! Us artists are very sensitive souls after all! But it would indeed be nice to have more of a creative dialogue with people here on DA I think, above and beyond the usual “great pic” and “thanks for the fave”!
Indeed, written critiques are hard to pitch right, but as long they are done with good intent then all’s good I think, and the emoticons can help enormously too to get the persons tone across and hopefully avoid any misunderstanding! Have a great weekend!